Saturday, November 7, 2009

Departed

Came into my heart
Filled with memories
That can never part
Things did fell apart
Which made you depart

15 More Jiggles:

Leo said...

hey Miya, loved this! the monorhyme goes good. runs almost through the poem. goood job!

nice words, elegantly and simply penned! :)

Parv Kaushik said...

very well written!! wish you could rhyme the 2nd line too... thr would be symmetry!!

gautami tripathy said...

Good rhyming there!

a winter tale

Shraddha@theselfloveproject said...

lovely poem!!

great going!

Amity Me said...

very sad Meow,

good memories will remain they are but we can't let them stay forever...:)

falling apart is beyond our control!

nice one dear!!!

SandyCarlson said...

Things do go wrong, and they become a test. Poignant in it brevity, this. Thanks.

Loch Rob said...

Hmm, I have lost count how many times this happened to me. At least I finally found the one who stayed. Nice.

Sweetest in the Gale said...

So sad and heartfelt...this was wonderful.

floreta said...

very nice rhyming :)

PS the Pratsie said...

sad things happen ! :|

Tumblewords: said...

Heartfelt sad!

anupama said...

Dear Friend,
Good Morning!
first time here.
nice rhyming words.memories are to be cherished.life is full of ups and downs.adjusting with each experience needs mental strength.
wishing you a great day ahead,
sasneham,
Anu

Jukota said...

nice tension in this poem.

Satyu said...

hmm.. :(

Beautifully written dear :)
Loved it!!

tc

Mads... said...

heyy..nice take on prompt..luved the wrds..thnx 4 droppin by at my space..hav read yr wrk..nice hand u hav on poetry..will visit again..:)
Cheers..:)